This text is about Nike who has created a special shoewear in collaboration with the OSHU Droenbecher Children's Hospital. The young patients get the opportunity to express their life stories in the designs of the shoes. The profits this project makes is for reseaches, trainings for specialists and to provice healthcare.
The Droenbecher patients are seriously ill. With this project they have the chance to get their mind off things. The patients work as real Nike designers and work through the whole entire design project. It's their moment in the spotlight. Sue Nicol - director of the foundation - is very happy with this project, which already raised over 2 million dollars. "It's a experience the kids really deserve and they'll never forget it."
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* The title is not clear
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(as was discussed in class!)
* You have not mentioned that Nike designers have teamed up with the children to design the shoes.
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This text is about Nike WHICH has created X special shoewear in collaboration with the OSHU Droenbecher Children's Hospital. The young patients get the opportunity to express their life stories in the designs of the shoes. The profits this project makes ARE for RESEARCH,
, trainings for specialists and to PROVIDE healthcare.(FOR THE UNINSURED!)
The Droenbecher patients are seriously ill. THIS project WILL TAKE their mind off things. The patients work as real Nike designers and work through the X entire design PROCESS. It's their moment in the spotlight. Sue Nicol - director of the foundation - is very happy with this project, which already raised over 2 million dollars. "It's aN experience the kids really deserve and they'll never forget it."
Mieke Westveen