Lingua Services Galactic
69 Milk Street
London SW7 6AW
Tel: (056) 334 572
Email: info@linguaservices.com.uk
8 february, 2010
Dreamtime Movies Universal Ltd
54 Oxford Street
Skagnes SK3 4RG
Dear Andrea,
With reference to your letter of 1th february, I'm writing back. I'm very sorry but I can't send you a brochure and pricelist because we got the new ones from 2010 yet. If you can tell me what the four languages are, then I can tell you the prices.
Also I have checked your website. We offer website editing services as well. We offer services like: renewing websites, keeping them up-to-date and giving them complete facelifts. I enclosed a pricelift for the editing services, in case you're interested.
Yours sincerely,
Beau Stolwijk
Marketing manager, beaustolwijk@linguaservices.com.uk, (045) 445 672
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top: the appearance is correct.
BeantwoordenVerwijderentip: the sentence i'm writing back seems silly. she's reading your letter so she knows you have written her.
tip: then must be than. then means toen and than means dan.
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BeantwoordenVerwijderenFormat and lay-out are correct. The only thing you forgot was to add a subject line.
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Grammar:
"1th February" = 1st (first)
Sloppiness (slordigheidsfouten):
"we got the new ones from 2010 yet"= we HAVEN'T got the new ones FOR 2010 yet
"I enclosed a pricelift (??)"
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The tone and style of this letter are not polite enough for a business letter.
'Also I have checked your website. We offer website editing services as well.' This sounds as if they have created a very bad website and
so should let you improve it.
'in case you're interested' sounds rude (I'm sure you didn't mean it to sound rude but in English it sound a bit sarcastic..)
Mieke Westveen
Tip: 'I'm writing back', isn't correct because when she receives your letter, you have already written her ;)
BeantwoordenVerwijderenTop: Lay-out.